Hello Reader, There are many approaches that can be taken to attempt a question given in the exam. In this blog, I have added three different ways a task has been handled along with remarks, in order that you get an insight into how to work upon a question and what type of credits you can expect out of them.
Answer 1
“The future belongs to women”. This phrase has been gaining popularity for at least two decades which negates the statement given in question. Let’s ponder.
Women are proven multitaskers. They have been handling the whole of the household without fail through generations, not to mention the professional life added recently and in no time they have attained higher positions there as well. This is the evidence of their competitive abilities only. Moreover, they are ruthless leaders who can stand in the face of adversities without faltering. In big organisations with lots of employees, they take good decisions without any hesitation, as they consider all aspects in no time and without letting anyone’s emotions affect them, carry on with their duties unobstructively.
As a matter of fact, they have an inherent capability to release their emotions, they cry when upset, smile when happy, whereas men are known to hide their emotions more or less. So, since they free their mind more often than their counter gender, they can be ready to face the next challenge in no time, making them having an edge over males. At this juncture, some may contend that as men are physically more capable, they seem to be more able to handle competition but I think only physical supremacy cannot decide the whole of personality of any being, in order to be combative you need to have many other traits which women no doubt possess.
To wind up, as far as my perspective goes, women have proved themselves to be much more capable at any possible field than men so considering men to be naturally more competitive would be a wrong notion.
The above write up can be called one of the best approaches to take the above question. This answer has complex structures, grammar is appropriate and the ideas have been well connected. So, as per the parameters of IELTS writing task judgement, this task can attain desirable scores.
Answer 2
People often compare the abilities of men and women and claim that women are not as competitive as men. I do not agree with this notion. Women are just as competitive as men are and they have proved their metal in almost all spheres.
Starting from academics, most of the toppers throughout the world are girls and they routinely outperform boys in other activities as well. If we compare a female athlete or female scientists, they are at par in terms of skills which their male counterparts possess.
With changing times, women are not behind men in any field. For an instance, in Indian air force women are given permission to fly fighter planes in the war times. Traditionally, these jobs were thought to be suitable only for men. The conservative countries have allowed the women to work, drive and join forces as well. Not only this, world produced amazing women leaders who are capable of running their countries.
Though men are physically stronger but muscular endurance should not be considered as only factor to support this notion. Women have certain biological and psychological duties that only they can perform. However, just because of these duties towards family and for raising kids women quit their jobs, it does not means that they are less competitive than men.
In conclusion, after analysis all aspects of the given statement, it is not hard to see that women are just as capable and competent as men. If there are fewer female achievers than male, that is because women tend to sacrifice their career for the sake of their families.
This approach has tried to answer the question as per demand but occasional grammatical errors, certain issues with cohesion and coherence (connectivity) would cost the writer some points.
Answer 3
Both men and women are created by the same entity. Still, there are a few people who believe that men are naturally more competitive than women. However, in my opinion, it would not be correct to claim that one is more competitive than other. Hence, I partially agree with the given statement and shall put forward my justification in the upcoming paragraphs.
It has been proven scientifically that women can do more than one tasks in a particular time which enhances their confidence level and makes them multitaskers. Females are more hardworking than men as they always learn from their mistakes and never give up. Moreover, they go through the different phases of life during their lifetime which automatically generates a quality of being adaptable to all the situations and circumstances. They have the capability to release their emotions as well, which makes them more adaptable as per the need of the situation.
On the other hand, if we talk about men, they are perceived to lead the clans since their ancient times as most of the rulers were men which developed the capability of taking the lead and ownership. Even if we talk about the current situation, the head of families, states and villages are men only. In addition to this, men do not have to face any physical barriers in their whole lives which helps them in remaining same physically. Physical stamina is also higher in case of males which gives them an advantage of hustling for longer times. Furthermore, men rarely care about others’ opinions related to themselves, hence, they stop bothering about anybody else and keep moving on towards their focus.
In a nutshell, roles and responsibilities of both men and women are same but perception and expectations differ making males seem superior.
This answer has tried to give a balanced answer but the conclusion doesn’t seem to be jellying with the introduction as conclusion tries to prove more genders to be equal which should be highlighted in the beginning but the expression “partially agree” does not convey the same idea. Moreover, instead of justifying their ideas the emphasis is more on highlighting more points. Apart from that, there are error of grammar as well as syntax which are visible in this essay.